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OSAS Sneak Peek

I just started writing and this came out, I hadn't planned on going here yet. I kinda like it though, and it opened up the possibility to me of working scenes from the future to inform the writing in the present tense of the story, if that makes any sense. Either way, here's a glimpse of a possible future for one of the Outer Space Adventure Saga boys. I hope you like it.

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The ravages of time were evident on the old weathered stones. The dull gray winter sky was echoed in the faded granite that jutted from the rippling field of blue grass. Wind whistled and moaned as it rushed past the ruined monument. Axar and Ziva stepped down lightly from their hovercraft. The rustling grass rose to their knees, tickling where it reached past their boots. It was a quiet place, and they hadn't spoken a word since they spotted it across the gently sloping grasslands.  Ziva reached the shattered pillar first, though neither of them was in any hurry. This was their honeymoon after all, and they weren't supposed to return until their spirits had bonded. Whatever that meant. It hadn't been a marriage of choice, but a matter of political significance. They had only first met today at their wedding, and had yet to hold a conversation. The ride away from civilization had been uncomfortable, neither knowing what to say.

Axar carefully watched his bride as she reached out and traced her fingers gentle through the deep, pitted grooves. She seemed to be a gentle person. He had never heard her raise her voice, or make even a single aggressive motion in the time he had known her. The ancient platform had been long claimed by the soil and grass, but what once must have been a square obelisk lie shattered across the plain. Even on its side, the rocks stood nearly two meters tall. She stood next to the dark thing and glowed. Her hair danced in the wind and he was lost in it until she turned and caught his look. Ziva smiled a new smile then, one he hadn't seen before but like a lot. It made him blush for the first time since he was a child. 

"Do you know what they mean?" He asked, diverting his gaze to the designs and symbols that covered every surface. Her smile didn't disappear even as she turned back to the stone and began speaking.
"They're old. This language uses a mixture of symbols with meaning and designs that alter those meanings depending on the other symbols, the placement, and other factors like that. This is left over from the ancient ancestors of my people, but they only used them in the most formal and permanent of settings, like worship settings or monuments. However..."

Ziva grabbed a hold of the top edge with both hands and vaulted her entire body up with one smooth motion, landing with both feet on top of the plinth.
"They can't be read as such. They are meant to evoke feelings or loose concepts, so they don't translate very well."

She cast him a look with that smile again and his knees almost buckled. They were married. He grinned back, clambering up after her. They stood together at the edge of ruin, upon the largest part of the once magnificent fallen tower. Seven concentric rings surrounded an eye by his left foot, a winding river flowed under her and forward, round and through all of the other patents and symbols. They could still make out most of them, as they were carved so deeply that ten thousand years in the open had not erased them. Axar was struck by the beauty and mystery of the place almost as much as he was by Ziva, with corresponding themes. He looked at her face. She was a stranger, why did he feel so drawn to her? For the first time in a long time, Axar didn't know what to expect. He wasn't in control of his own destiny, and for once he wasn't sure he cared.

"What kind of feeling are these designs meant to evoke?", he asked.

She didn't move for a moment, her eyes sweeping back and forth once more. Ziva turned to him then, and her eyes were locked with his. 

"I am no scholar of these things, but it is a monument to creativity, and a ward against forces of destruction and despair. It actually has a message though in plain symbols. There, by the knot in the center. It says 'Fight Against Emptiness'"

The wind whipped her hair across her face, and the moment passed. They looked for a while more, then set out again across the sea of grass.


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